Talk:Slatina
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Ikan Kekek in topic "Understand" section
"Understand" section
[edit]I'm glad an article on this city was started. I think "Understand" needs some work. It has a very detailed, formal and scholarly feel that doesn't strike me as the right tone for this travel guide. Perhaps some of it could be useful at w:Slatina, but for this article, I think it would be best to greatly shorten the section, summarizing key points, especially those that cover things a visitor could see (for example, I imagine some Geto-Dacian coins are on exhibit somewhere, so mention where). Ikan Kekek (talk) 10:52, 12 December 2018 (UTC)
- Some of the complicated sentences are also pretty hard to understand because they are not structured in a way a native speaker of English would write. Some examples:
- The continuity of habitation of the free Dacians of an unintegrated space in the Roman Empire in an organized form, but strongly influenced by Romanity (so that it can be appreciated as a latinophone territory), is fully justified by the Chilia-Militari cultural aspect, developed from the late phase of the Geto-Dacian "La Tèneu", which, through various, grew intense romanization.
- Eh? Aside from grammatical problems, Chilia-Militari hasn't been explained or even mentioned before this.
- After the withdrawal of the Roman occupation in Dacia (271 AD), a Dacian-Roman autochthonous population, backed by Romanity and Christianity, was behind the migratory population, preserving its identity for centuries.
- What does "behind" mean? I think this is what the sentence is supposed to mean:
- "After the Roman withdrawal in 271, the local Dacian-Roman population, by then Christian, remained locally dominant and culturally distinct for centuries."
- In the context of the generalization of rural life, the existing rural community will be organized into territorial communities or popular Romanians (as they are known in our historical tradition), representing solid demographic, linguistic and romantic culture nuclei.
- Nuclei? Solid? Generalization? Will be? I think this entire sentence should be removed.
- In Ipoteşti, near Slatina, for the first time, the content of such a Romanesque was identified, which was later enriched with similar discoveries. These belong to the Ipoteşti - Cândeşti - Ciurel culture created by the indigenous peoples in the 5th - 7th centuries.
- OK, I think I could summarize this as "Dacian-Roman culture eventually coalesced into the Romanesque culture of the 5th-7th centuries."
- The findings from the Sopot Valley settlement highlight the occupations and crafts of a sedentary population: agriculture, animal husbandry, pottery, blacksmithing, torso or tissue. The Christian testimonies existing in the dwelling area (eg the Byzantine bay) argue for continuity of dwelling and close ties to Roman-Byzantine and then Byzantine civilization, the center of dissemination of Christianity.
- OK, none of this is hard to understand, but only if there is anything a visitor can see does it really make sense to mention any of this in a travel guide.
- That's all I've got right now. Ikan Kekek (talk) 11:05, 12 December 2018 (UTC)